Wesley's suggestion for three students

1.
Anny, you did a great job writing this out! I have a couple of suggestions for you, and you'll find them below in RED.

Keep studying that English!

-wes

Dear friends,

My name is Anny, and I'm fourteen years old. I am not so beautiful, but I am kind and cute. I like to study books, do lots of exercise, surf the Net, and watch TV in my free time. Doing these things helps me to feel happy. My favorite subject is English. English is an important language in the world. Everyone uses English to talk with others, so I will continue to study it. I want to be a teacher and teach in another country in the future. It can make a lot of money, and it also can help me know more about different cultures.


Well done, Michelle. I do have a few suggestions for you, and you'll find them below in RED

Thanks for letting me look over it!

-wes

2.

Dear friends,

My name is Michelle. I like to watch TV in my free time since there are so many shows in Taiwan.
My favorite subject is English because learning English is interesting. I like to play with my younger sister because we have many of the same hobbies. The train station is too far away from my house, so I go to school by bus. I don't like to study science because it's too hard for me. I would like to be a super star in the future because it can make a lot of money.

3.
Good job, Tina. You'll find my corrections in RED...Your English seems terrific!

Iris, will this be a speech, or are people going to read it? I will edit all of these just in case they will be read.

-wes


Dear friends ,

My name is Tina, and I am fourteen years old. I go to school by car every day because my school is so far away from my home. My favorite subject is English because it is easy for me. Learning English is fun, just like playing a computer. I also like to listen to music. Whenever I can listen to music, I feel so relaxed. My hobby is going shopping; I can buy many clothes and shoes in the department store. I dislike being alone. I feel bad if no one will talk with me. So obviously, I like to make many friends. I want to be a model because it can make a lot of money, and then I can go abroad for my further studies.